Pretty much every year 11 person I have worked with this week has mentioned an English Language paper 1 test next week. Another mentioned there might be a Jekyll and Hyde one on the horizon.
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Analyse/ explain (lengthy and detailed)
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General point: As the danger draws nearer, the sounds in the scene grow more intense, heightening the sense of peril for the characters.
Evidence: whisper, rumble, “Then there came a chattering noise, like the amplified jaws of a million termites chewing on wood. The noise itself filled her ears” shouting(!) (these are all in eloquently phrased sentences)
Analyse: All the above evidence as part of one point. This way your analysis can be spread and doesn’t need to go so deep.
Then link it back to the question.
By doing it this way you get all your evidence and analysis into just a couple of paragraphs so you don’t need to find so many relevant points and you don’t need to analyse each one in such depth.
As the danger draws nearer, the sounds in the scene grow more intense, heightening the sense of peril for the characters.
Initially, there is only a "whisper of her skis" and a "rumble" that grows louder, transforming into "a roaring in her ears" and "a chattering noise, like the amplified jaws of a million termites chewing on wood," which eventually "filled her ears." The soundscape intensifies further with Jake’s shouted warnings: "Get to the side! To the side!" and "Hang on to a tree!"
The progression of sound in this extract mirrors the characters' rising tension and the impending disaster. At first, the whisper and rumble suggest a minor disturbance, but as the sounds escalate into a roar, the reader is made acutely aware of the imminent threat of the avalanche. The chattering noise—described vividly as being like amplified termites—evokes a feeling of something relentless, gnawing, and inescapable. The amplification of the noise suggests the overwhelming power of the avalanche, engulfing both Zoe and the reader in its destructive force. Jake’s urgent shouts are soon drowned by the deafening roar, emphasising the hopelessness of the situation. The intensifying soundscape immerses the reader in Zoe's frantic attempts to escape, building suspense until the inevitable silence of the avalanche's aftermath.
This escalation of sound reflects both the physical danger of the avalanche, and the emotional turmoil experienced by the characters, drawing the reader deeper into the unfolding disaster.
(I cheated here and asked ChatGPT to write the paragraph for me, but I think it shows how several pieces of evidence have been embedded into the analysis.)
I hope this helps; any questions please do ask.
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Morning,
I hope the week is going well.
So many people seem to be doing D of E and work experience
at the moment, good luck if that’s you and if you’re at Marlow Camp next
fingers crossed for good weather!
I’ve just finished a lesson on division. It seems to be
something that messes with the brains of so many people.
I found it got easier when I stopped thinking about it as
division and instead thought about it as multiplication. So, if for example I
had the question 396 divided by 3, I would look at it as 3x what = 3. My answer
would be 1. How many times would I need to multiply 3 to get to 9, (my answer
would be 3). Then 3x something = 6. My answer would be 2. Giving me the overall
answer of 132.
I know that’s a really simple example but hopefully it explains
my point.
Thankfully in schools they don’t often seem to need to do
long division, but I’ve worked with a couple of adults (generally nurses for
some reason) who have needed it.
I think I’ll explain this one in a video, as it will be too
complicated to explain it with words as bits get put all over the place. I hope
this makes sense though:
Enjoy the rest of the week and speak soon,
Dawn